Tip #11 Eliminate Even More Non-Essential Words; Write It Over Again! And Again!

For sale: baby shoes, never worn.”

This story was written by Ernest Hemingway, and maybe it wasn’t Hemingway who penned it originally, but it was Hemingway won the Noble Prize and the Pulitzer Prize for his writing in the 1950s. Many of claim this story isn’t one of his, but I like to think it is one. I know Hemingway once said he rewrote the ending to a novel thirty-seven because he hadn’t found the right words. The story above all has six words in it. How many times had the author rewritten it until he got it right? If you have a chance you might want to check out his collection, In Our Time. 

In my story, ‘Red Moon’ from the my collection, Time Code. This is how I wrote the story the first time:

Fog creeps in over the waves.

Teenagers dance near a bonfire.

The moon turns to blood.

Two years later, I rewrote the story as a haiku for Edward Bryant’s Sphere of Influence:

Fog creeps over waves. 

Teenagers dance near fire. 

The moon turns to blood.

Little changes, a few words missing or changed but I think it better now. Is it the same story? Am I finished with this story? I don’t know. Maybe I will rewrite it again in a couple of years until I get it right. Who knows?

Author: Chuck Anderson

Chuck Anderson is an art-student, baker, runner, publisher, and writer who lives in Colorado. https://madcow.press

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